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Contest Entry - A Girl's Dream of Nature

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Thank you uchuubranko for leaving a critique for this! dA is not featuring it (I didn't get the chance to put it as fair/unfair :stare: ) so please view it here uchuubranko.deviantart.com/cri… :hug:






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<EDIT> -     Haha oh stink xD didn't get in the top 3 places, but there were many good artists so they deserve it, congrats! <3       <EDIT/END>




Contest entry for this - fav.me/d7eav0m - organised by cicialexa

THERE'S SO MANY GOOD ARTISTS I DON'T KNOW IF I'LL WIN??? 




This was a perfect chance for me to practice backgrounds a.k.a nature (it was my frist time drawing pretty much all of this so it looks horrible bleugh)
sORRY FOR THE BLUE OVERFLOW AHAHAH





I hope you like it, any asks/comments/critiques are always welcomed Heart Hug 
Thank you for all your favourites/watches, I really appreciate it :) (Smile)

PLEASE DO NOT REPOST OR EDIT MY ART WITHOUT MY PERMISSION I NOW HAVE A TUMBLR SO PLEASE REBLOG/LIKE/NOTE IT THERE, THANK YOU FOR YOUR CO-OPERATION - sketchere.tumblr.com/


OC - Lilly (c) - cicialexa 
Art (c) - sketchere 
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:star::star::star::star: Overall
:star::star::star::star::star-half: Vision
:star::star::star::star::star-empty: Originality
:star::star::star::star::star-half: Technique
:star::star::star::star::star-half: Impact

Hello, here is the critique! Please reply if you have some other questions or disagree with something, I'll do my best! <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/l/l…" width="26" height="17" alt=":love:" data-embed-type="emoticon" data-embed-id="276" title="Love"/> <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/h/h…" width="15" height="13" alt=":heart:" data-embed-type="emoticon" data-embed-id="357" title="Heart"/>

First off, let me start with a WOAH WHAT A GORGEOUS BLUE! <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/n/n…" width="15" height="15" alt=":noes:" data-embed-type="emoticon" data-embed-id="556" title="Noes!"/> I absolutely love the tones you used here, it reminds me of ink, perhaps a deep blue well suited for forests, nights, and deep thoughts! The brush work on it is also superbly done, the grass is magnificent! You did very well by bringing in a contrast between the light blue grass and the dark ground part the girl is sitting on. <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/l/l…" width="19" height="19" alt=":la:" data-embed-type="emoticon" data-embed-id="577" title="La la la la"/> The water and front grass are well positioned as well!
- One thing I would like to add is, that while the colours are ahwesome, it gets a bit intense for the eyes if I look for 15 minutes continuously. It's rather a suggestion related to preferences, but adding some more colours (such as purple-brown for the trees, orange for some flowers there and there?) will perhaps make it more captivating. Although it does have its own charm for such gorgeous blue! <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/l/l…" width="19" height="19" alt=":la:" data-embed-type="emoticon" data-embed-id="577" title="La la la la"/>

Forest
- The perspective is really really good! I like how they're fading in thin blue colour. The light source is mysterious and definitely a good touch!
- There is one colour I find it doesn't fit : the ...potion-ish green! <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/x/x…" width="15" height="15" alt=":XD:" data-embed-type="emoticon" data-embed-id="93" title="XD"/> I also have a piece which is composed only with green & deep blue and I really don't like it <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/l/l…" width="19" height="21" alt=":lmao:" data-embed-type="emoticon" data-embed-id="51" title="Laughing my ass off!"/> I find they're too different somehow, that they're not destined with each other...<img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s…" width="21" height="19" alt=":saddummy:" data-embed-type="emoticon" data-embed-id="598" title="Sad dummy"/> To fix this issue, I've tried gradually including green by brushing fristly with light blue >> turquoise/ cyan >> light green >> lime green >> yellow-ish green <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/l/l…" width="19" height="19" alt=":la:" data-embed-type="emoticon" data-embed-id="577" title="La la la la"/> This is merely a suggestion.

Character
I must say her hair is gorgeously done! <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/l/l…" width="26" height="17" alt=":love:" data-embed-type="emoticon" data-embed-id="276" title="Love"/> The skin is shaded beautifully and with a good colour, not too plain, not very catchy but fitting in the environment! <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/l/l…" width="19" height="19" alt=":la:" data-embed-type="emoticon" data-embed-id="577" title="La la la la"/>
- Position-wise : here are some things you might want to look out for! Her skirt folds and legs make us think she's about to stand. Perhaps the legs should go further inside the grass part to make her look more stable.
- The eyes : She looks a bit like she isn't looking at the bird, but in front of her. The eyes look forced, I suggest distancing and perhaps shaping them like (basically the \ line is the nose, the < are the eye outlines) :

( <\<) and not ( <\> )

Lastly, the birdie needs a bit more clarification, you could easily do that by detailing less the background surrounding it, adding shine to the bird, or lining it! <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/l/l…" width="19" height="19" alt=":la:" data-embed-type="emoticon" data-embed-id="577" title="La la la la"/>

I hope this was helpful in a way or another! <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/t/t…" width="15" height="15" alt=":thanks:" data-embed-type="emoticon" data-embed-id="488" title="Thanks for everything!"/> Don't hesitate to ask for clarifications! <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/h/h…" width="38" height="15" alt=":hug:" data-embed-type="emoticon" data-embed-id="160" title="Hug"/>

Happy arting, you have gorgeous pieces! <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/d/d…" width="29" height="28" alt=":dalove:" data-embed-type="emoticon" data-embed-id="573" title="I love deviantART!"/>